Stella took in every word that Colin Harmon uttered, but she would not sit at his knee in rapt adoration like the other acolytes. She ignored his subtle overtures, his determination to reform her writing style in ways that were contrary to her own heart. He labeled her one of his most resistant students, not because she didn’t understand his teaching, but because she refused to implement those teachings that didn’t feel right. Colin’s spare prose and insightful knowledge of character and plotting was missing passion. It troubled Stella’s writerly sensibilities.
Not that Colin Harmon wasn’t capable of passion. Stella and two other writers had inadvertently discovered his secret passion for one of their very attractive fellow writers, a 9.5 on the Richter scale. Weekly critique sessions at his home became a source of amusement for the three as the lovers attempted to conceal their involvement. But Stella observed on more than one occasion that Colin Harmon’s sweet wife, who drifted in and out of the room like a shadow, seemed to be drinking quite heavily. She had born him a half dozen children, ran his household and publishing business, and accommodated his writing career in every way. She was the woman behind the man and she seemed to be in trouble. Perhaps she suspected his betrayal. When would he tell her?
During one evening writers’ session, while Stella and all the writers were seated at the long dining table, Colin’s wife came flying out of the kitchen, her face flushed with anger. A cold chill ran down Stella’s back as the woman’s furious eyes locked on Stella. Colin Harmon's secret love life, the source of so much gossip, was about to explode. Sweet Jesus, Stella muttered. She thinks I’m the one.
Hi Linda! Thank you for joining up officially. I'm glad you've been a regular contributor lately as your voice is unique. Well, I suppose we all have unique writing voices, but I mean you are quite different - and I love it. You always catch me at the end. I never know what to expect with your twist, and that is one of the hallmarks of flash fiction writing.
ReplyDeleteI loved the wife: 'Colin Harmon’s sweet wife, who drifted in and out of the room like a shadow...' Hmm, some shadow eh?
I like how this God had feet of clay. I hope he gets his just desserts, not Stella!
Denise
Dear Linda,
ReplyDeleteWhat a clever story!
You drew me into the text with the words 'They thought he was God'. What an opening!
Great descriptions such as: She had born him a half dozen children, ran his household and publishing business, and accommodated his writing career in every way. She was the woman behind the man and she seemed to be in trouble.
Snappy ending.
Love this one!
Best wishes,
Anna
Anna's Perfect 9.5 for RFW No 32
STELLA! STELLA! STELLA! (stomping feet and clapping hands)
ReplyDeleteWow! Can you define a protagonist and antagonist in such a short space? Yes she can, and I bow to you. My, have you a talent for weaving intrigue into this short story! I found this excellent.
Hi S.
ReplyDeleteOh what a delightful twist at the end. Love your writing and the way this tale played out. I think I might have had a professor like this before.
Nancy
This. Was. Perfect.
ReplyDeleteI was completely engrossed in the story, wanting to know exactly where it was going, but not wanting it to be over.
Great!
Laura x
Dear Linda,
ReplyDeleteI have made the corrections that you suggested in a revision that can be found after the RFW-badge on my post. I have also written an extra 'P.S.'-text; but I don't know what to do with the extra seven words that I have gained. For me this story is complete.
Thanks for taking the time to write these suggestions.
Best wishes,
Anna
xo
Really enjoyed reading your piece, Linda. So engaging and a clever twist at the end. Flash is certainly a strength in your writing arsenal.
ReplyDeleteLoved the twisted ending Linda. The descriptions of your characters was just amazing for such a short piece. I felt as if i knew these people and their intrigues.
ReplyDeleteWell done.
......dhole
Hello.
ReplyDeleteI'm really enjoying your RFW entries, Linda. The scene setting & character descriptions were quite vivid.
You've got me anxiously waiting for a continuation of this with that unexpected twist at the end.
Nicely written.
Thanks for sharing.
True Beauty Comes from Imperfection
Thank you all for taking the time to read my entry. I'm afraid I have been a little slow reading all your entries. I promise to get through them this evening!
ReplyDeleteCame back for another read Linda. It is even better second time around. D.
ReplyDeleteDid you know you have the dreaded WV Captcha Codes for your commenters which are SO hard to read??? D.
ReplyDeleteNo Denise, I didn't know that I had a Captcha code problem. So how do you fix that? I know a lot of blogs use them and they often give me grief.
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